Essay Number 13

True Love Built up or Fallen Into:

An Essay about Building up True Love

An Essay by Gaelen Frink

Eighth Grade English

Pine Point School

April 20, 2011

When you think about love you always think of how it happens in the movies, but love like that doesn’t last, but when you build up love this love lasts and this is called true love. When I am older I believe I will have to build up my true love because when I see a captivating girl I do not immediately love her because I have not built any love with her. Also, a couple that I know that truly loves each other is my parents and there are many reasons why. Love is a tricky subject, but when used with care love can be wonderful, but this love must be built up because if it isn’t love won’t last.

Love has to be built up until it reaches the point of true love for you cannot fall into true love. When you talk about true love many people do not have a Romeo and Juliet case of falling into love, people forge this love. Sometimes people have known each other for a long time and already know many things about each other. Since you already know many properties about this person, this takes care of the unpleasant moments in your relationship. Real love will probably happen to me by, building this love up, constructing trust inside of my love and reaching the high point of true love. Even when you see someone who is captivating you do not love them because you do not know their personality. You need to build up your friendship with them and learn about this person before you can say you love them. Love can’t be made or fallen into; love must be built up, and then once love is constructed this love can only be called true love.  

            A truly loving couple that I know is my parents and even though they seem to have fallen into love they are still a truly loving couple. A reason that I think that my parents are a truly loving couple is because they are still together and not divorced even though 50% of couples get divorced these days (Mr. Salsich). I also think that even though they have bickered before these fights actually can make a truly loving relationship stronger than it was before. I also think a testament of their true love is that they have been together for 19 years. If they have been together that long they are obviously still in love because they wouldn’t still be together if they didn’t love each other. My parents are an example of falling into love this proves that love can be formed many different ways and this is one way. Even though they fell into this loving relationship, lasting years, withstanding the many fights accumulated over the years they are still together not separated and staying contented together. My parents love each other deeply and will continue to love each other until the end of their lives because they are in a truly loving relationship.

            Romeo and Juliet fall into love when they see each other for the first time and this is much different than the real world because we have to build our love. Love must be built until it reaches the highest point of love and only at this point can this love be called true love. My parents truly love each other because they are in true love, and I hope they continue this love for many more years. Love in its many different forms can be love but not true love because building love only creates true love.

Self Assessment

1.      An issue in my writing that I am still working on is my transition words from sentence to sentence because some of my chunks jump from one another without a word in between.

2.      A strong point that I see in this piece of writing would probably be my concluding sentence on my first body paragraph because I think that this sentence really sums up the paragraph.

3.      A weak point I see in this piece of writing would probably be my redundancy in my intro second body paragraph and my conclusion.

4.      I would give my self a C+ - B- for this essay.

Outline for Essay Number 13

TS: I think that with love you have to build it up till you reach the point of true love

Bell word: Build

Echoes: Forge, Construct, Build

SD: When you talk about true love most people do not have a Romeo and Juliet case of falling into love, people have to forge this love

CM: Sometimes people have known each other for a long time and already know many things about each other.

CM: Since you already know many things about this person this takes care of the awkward moments in your relationship

SD: Real love will probably happen to me by building love up

CM: Even when you see someone attractive you don’t love them because you do not know their personality

CM: You need to build up your friendship and learn about this person before you can say you love them

CS: Love can’t be made or fallen into; love must be built up and then once love is built up this love can only be called true love.

14 Line Sonnet

Friendship is like a plant ever growing
You only get out what you put into it
You need to take care when you are sowing
And during this friendship you need a wit
The best friendships sometimes last very long
Lasting friendships need to learn to endure
Hopefully you can see your friends lifelong
During the enduring time friendships mature 
When I am feeling down and I am blue
I turn to my friends for a bit of help
They sometimes pick me up from where I lie
This will help us stick together like glue
This also means they answered my cry for help
This means our friendship will get to Shanghai

Essay Number 12

Food is like:

An Essay about Metaphors Related to Friendship 

An Essay by Gaelen Frink

Eighth Grade English

Pine Point School

April 18, 2011

Metaphors are everywhere, sometimes hidden from the careless ear, but some can be discovered by any who hears them, and my metaphors on friendship are those kind. Metaphors on friendship to me are like different foods. Foods come in billions of different kinds, flavors and also sizes. Friends are like food.

For everyone who knows me, they all know that I love food, so it is only natural that I relate my essay on friendship to different foods. The first food that seemed to relate to some of my friends is chocolate because chocolate is a quick pick me up. Chocolate is like a friend because it can help you when you are feeling down. Once you have chocolate you can get a little hyper and energetic from the sugar buzz and, this is a big difference from how you were feeling before, but chocolate can also help you indulge in life. Another food I was able to relate a friend to was friendship is like an Oreo. While I am the inside, the filling, my mate, Charlie, is the outside, the two cookies. I find an Oreo to be like friendship because this friend surrounds me and helps me when I am lost. Lastly I can see friendship like pizza with all of the toppings. I can see this because I would be the crust and if I was the crust I would be supporting everything else on top of me, holding up the sauce and the cheese, supporting the pepperoni and sausage and bearing the weight of all of the vegetables. This is the other side of friendship where you help your friends by helping them feel better or keeping their spirits up because you support them. Friends can have many different disguises or ways to be described, but in the end they are all the same, thoughtful, caring and just good old friends that you have known for a long time.

            Metaphors are everywhere, different types and different meanings, but some can mean the same thing, but under a different cover. I connected friendship with food, but you could connect friendship with many other things like flowers, a tree and literally anything else. Friendship is like food it can be related to any type. Friendship is like chocolate, an Oreo and a pizza.

Self Assessment

1.      One writing issue I am continuing to work on is my use of commas because I think I have a few unnecessary commas in my writing.

2.      One strong point I see in this essay is my long sentence because it really helps explain that chunk.

3.      One possible weak point I see is that I might not have enough details to back some of my chunks.

4.      The grade I would give myself would probably be a B- to a B

Outline for Essay Number 12

TS: Friends to me are like different foods

Bell Word: Friends
Echoes playmate

SD: Chocolate can pick you up

CM: This is like friends who help you when you are down

CM: Chocolate is a sugary food which gets you hyper and helps you indulging life.

SD:Friendship can also be like an Oreo

CM: I am the filling while one of my good friends, my playmate surrounds me.

CM:This to me would be my best friend who I have

SD: Friendship could also be a pizza

CM:If I was the crust then everything on top of me would be stuff that I would be holding up.

CM: I only have a few friendships where I encourage someone to do good

CS:There are a few things that I can relate to but food is something that I can find many metaphors inside of

Outline for Essays

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Essay Number 11

Perplexed Teens:

An Essay about Problems Faced by Teenagers

An Essay by Gaelen Frink

Eighth Grade English

Pine Point School

April 6, 2011

           

Teens or teenagers here in Stonington, in the US and in World face many problems throughout their life, but the teen years are especially problematic. In the year 2011 some problems faced by teenagers could be anything, but I thought that the problem of parents getting divorced was a big problem because so many parents get divorced these days. A problem that I face time and time again is the lack of free time, and this problem doesn’t leave me much time to do what I want to do.  Teenagers of 2011 face many problems and I as a teenagers have my share of problems.

Teenagers face many problems on a whole host of topics from trouble with bullies to your parent’s divorce. One problem between an older and younger sibling can be, sibling rivalry. This rivalry can be bodily disagreements like punching, hitting, wrestling and kicking, but this rivalry can also be verbal abuse where these two siblings insult one another, and call each other mean names until one gets too hurt by what the other said, and he/she falls apart and cries from sadness. Not only is this fighting bad for these two siblings, but this is bad for the whole family from the stress of breaking up struggles. Another problem teenager’s face is the possibility of their parent’s getting divorced or splitting up. When your parents get divorced, a declaration dissolving a marriage, this disconnects the family and this forces the teenager to live at two homes. If one of the parents finds a new partner the teenager then has to learn to accept and welcome this new person into the family. One problem some teenagers face at school or other places is the problem of bullying.  Bullying is an issue throughout the country and probably in the world. The bullying dilemma has many forms, cyber bullying, physical bullying and emotional bullying, even though there are many forms they are all equally bad. Some teenagers face one big problem in their life, like their parents divorce, while other teenagers face many small problems.

            In my teen years and years before I have faced a few struggles. One being a younger brother to an older brother means many things for me. Sometimes he can be looked up to and I really admire him. On the other hand at other times in my life he can be very mean and very quick to punch me, but when I punch him back I get blamed and in trouble. Another problem is no free time sometimes then lots of free time on other nights. This could be from the increase of homework from lower to middle school because we went from half an hour to an hour of homework to three hours, and this leaves us no free time, but on some nights we barely have anything to do. So sometimes one wishes we didn’t receive so much homework so we could do more of what we want to do. Another problem I sometimes face is the problem of insulting and aggravating comments. Sometimes people will insult the way I look or the way I do things and sometimes they even make fun of what I say. While some of these comments I don’t take, but the other comments hurt me deep inside, but it doesn’t show at least not sometimes. Sometimes I only realize what people have said until I stop and think about what was said. My problems may be petty to some people, but to me they are important, these are my problems as a teenager in 2011.

When you think of being a teenager when you are young you think that it will be great because you will have so much freedom, but this freedom is taken away by your problems. From the problems of 2011 teenagers divorce is probably the biggest to me, but there are many other problems other people face that some people don’t even know about. Many people don’t know about some of my problems but that is the way I like to keep it. Problems, everyone faces them teens face many because these are the self conscious years, but teens face many.

Self Assessment:

1. Thing writing issue I am continuing to work on is the problem of using unnecessary words. This is a problem because it makes some sentences awkward.
2. A strong point in this essay is my long sentences which help compliment my writing by the way they flow.
3. A possible weak point I see in this essay is the problem of using too many commas where they don’t belong.
4. A grade that I would give myself would be a B to a B+.