Essay Number 3

Metaphors:

A Metaphor on Myself
By: Gaelen Frink

Pine Point School

October 4, 2010

            When you compare yourself to something, the possibilities are endless. From mountains to rocks to forests, every person can find something to describe themselves. I am a river
            (TS) People can compare themselves to anything they think of. (SD) What I chose is I am like a river. (CM1) Whenever a river hits a rock or rapids, the water just goes over it. (CM2)This is like me because whenever I hit a roadblock in my life, I work to overcome it slowly, just as a river flows. (SD) In addition, when a river flows it changes the way the river looks and this can be like eroding the banks or taking rocks away to a different spot in the river, this can also be like me changing. (CM1) In my life this could be like losing friends, but new ones will come from upstream.(CM2)This also could be like when you go downstream you see the rocks that left you got stuck and you could meet them again, so, if you lose friends just remember you could meet them again. (SD) Also, a river may look boring and a seasoned river, but in the water there are fish and very interesting things. (CM1) This is like your personality. (CM2) Like in each river they are all different and no one person is the same.
            When I describe myself, I say I am a river. Someone may say that I am something different, but in many ways, I see myself as river.

Self Assessment

1. Combining sentences

2. Good punctuation

3. Not long enough conclusion/introduction

4.C+

Essay Number 2

Gaelen Frink Essay #2
English Class
September 22, 2010

Strangeness

My Thoughts on Myself

           When some people think of themselves, they think of themselves as cool or awesome. I can think like that, but instead I think of myself as strange or different. This is an essay about myself.  
            (TS) Some of friends say I am a very weird person, although I do not totally agree to this, my friends convinced me to write about myself. (SD) When I am sick, something unusual happens when I sneeze and blow my nose, it happens very loud. (CM1)When I once sneezed in the hallway, Mrs. Owen knew I was coming. (CM2) In addition, all my friends say my nose blowing is super loud, and it scares people who are not prepared for it.  (SD) Secondly, people say I have a very different laugh, and uncontrollable laugh. (CM1) This might be because I laugh many times at things that are not that funny. (CM2) One time, I was laughing so hard when I was eating, and I could not stop laughing, and while this was happening, I had food in my mouth, and you can just imagine what happened. (SD) Lastly, anybody who knows me knows I love food. (CM1) When we ran the mile for school, my first time of the year was about 10 minutes. (CM2) For the second mile of the year, I had a time of about 7:36 and the reason for the big improvement was Oreos, and this just proves how much I love food. (CS) I might be a little different in many ways; no, make that more than usual, but at least I am able to admit it.

Bizarre, or any other word or synonym that describes strange all remind me of myself. All of these words are related to strange. People sometimes might call someone weird, but that person may think it is a good thing. Whenever someone calls me weird I will say thank you and I know.

2nd Frestyle Writing

Gaelen Frink 
 When you think of fun, what do you think of? When I think of fun, I think of skiing. Skiing is something that I do every weekend in the winter. In addition, when I think of fun I think of the winter, because of all of the fun things you can do. I am not like one of those people who hate the cold I actually like the cold. The only cold I do not like is the very cold and when your toes go numb in your ski boots you ask yourself, "Why am I out here, am I nuts," but then you think of all the fun you have and how training pays off. When you ask yourself that question you know that only the people who really care about what they are doing are out there. When I also think of fun, I think of winning. This does not have to be winning a big event; this can be winning something small. You just know you finally won. That is the moment of triumph.

Essay Number 1

Gaelen Frink Essay 1
September 15, 2010
English Class

 Wake Me Up When September Ends:

A Song About Summer

Does anyone ever think about school when summer starts, because I know when summer started I was never thinking about the beginning of school. When we were assigned this essay, I knew that "Wake Me Up When September Ends" by Green Day was the perfect song for this assignment. These are my thoughts about the end of summer and the beginning of school
            (TS) The end of summer seemed to come so fast and it was so surprising when it came and I knew that "Wake Me Up When September Ends" by Green Day was the perfect song. (SD) In "Wake Me Up When September Ends" by Green Day the lead singer says, "Summer has come and passed." (CM1) To me this is like when we're in school it still seems like summer even though we're in school. (CM2) In addition, in this phrase it seems like to the person who wrote this song their summer went by way too fast. This is like my summer. (SD) Another phrase in this song is, "Wake me up when September ends." (CM1) This phrase to me reminds me of waking up every morning in the beginning of the school year, which is in September. (CM2) In addition, in September, we get back into the swing of things for all of our classes and at the end of September, this usually happens. (SD) Near the end of the song, there is the line, "Drenched in my pain again." (CM1) In the beginning of summer, we are usually drenched in memories of what happened last year over the summer. (CM2) Instead of being drenched in your painful memories, you are drenched in your happy ones at the beginning of the summer. (CS) Whenever I hear this song, it reminds me of the summers I have had before and that in turn reminds me of all my happy memories from past summers, but I also look forward to up coming summers.
            Whenever school starts, I always start looking forward to things that are coming up. I would never look forward to the next summer because that is too far away. Instead I look forward to skiing or a school sport, but in the back of my mind I am still thinking about it.

1. I am still working on remembering all my commas and punctuation.
2. I really liked my topic paragraph because i felt i said everything I was thinking.
3. A weak point could be my concluding paragraph because I might not of wrapped up my essay
right.
4. A-

1st Freestyle Writing

When you look outside when it is almost sunset you see the sky. When it is during the summer, you see some beautiful sunsets. Right now though, the sky is a dark gray, but the clouds that are out now have a little bit of orange red light on them from the sun, which is setting very quickly. Also outside are the trees, which are swaying so much from the winds outside. On those trees, are the leaves that changed color a bit premature, and they are clinging on every so tightly so they do not blow off in the breeze. Already, the sky has darkened to a very dark and it looks very intimidating. The things that I was able to see before I cannot see even though little time has passed; all I can see are their silhouettes. Everything outside seems like fall, the weather, the trees, and the wind, all these things remind me all the falls we have had before. Soon the weather will start to get colder, and we will be into the winter months, and we will have snow on the ground and everything we do will be different.