Food is like:
An Essay about Metaphors Related to Friendship
An Essay by Gaelen Frink
Eighth Grade English
Pine Point School
April 18, 2011
Metaphors are everywhere, sometimes hidden from the careless ear, but some can be discovered by any who hears them, and my metaphors on friendship are those kind. Metaphors on friendship to me are like different foods. Foods come in billions of different kinds, flavors and also sizes. Friends are like food.
For everyone who knows me, they all know that I love food, so it is only natural that I relate my essay on friendship to different foods. The first food that seemed to relate to some of my friends is chocolate because chocolate is a quick pick me up. Chocolate is like a friend because it can help you when you are feeling down. Once you have chocolate you can get a little hyper and energetic from the sugar buzz and, this is a big difference from how you were feeling before, but chocolate can also help you indulge in life. Another food I was able to relate a friend to was friendship is like an Oreo. While I am the inside, the filling, my mate, Charlie, is the outside, the two cookies. I find an Oreo to be like friendship because this friend surrounds me and helps me when I am lost. Lastly I can see friendship like pizza with all of the toppings. I can see this because I would be the crust and if I was the crust I would be supporting everything else on top of me, holding up the sauce and the cheese, supporting the pepperoni and sausage and bearing the weight of all of the vegetables. This is the other side of friendship where you help your friends by helping them feel better or keeping their spirits up because you support them. Friends can have many different disguises or ways to be described, but in the end they are all the same, thoughtful, caring and just good old friends that you have known for a long time.
Metaphors are everywhere, different types and different meanings, but some can mean the same thing, but under a different cover. I connected friendship with food, but you could connect friendship with many other things like flowers, a tree and literally anything else. Friendship is like food it can be related to any type. Friendship is like chocolate, an Oreo and a pizza.
Self Assessment
1. One writing issue I am continuing to work on is my use of commas because I think I have a few unnecessary commas in my writing.
2. One strong point I see in this essay is my long sentence because it really helps explain that chunk.
3. One possible weak point I see is that I might not have enough details to back some of my chunks.
4. The grade I would give myself would probably be a B- to a B
Dear Gaelen,
ReplyDeleteIt is a very interesting Essay Gaelen, great job. I like how you related your friends to food. What I want to recommend you to do is to write some examples like how your friends helped you when you were lost... Also, I think you should put your friends' names. Moreover, explain about your FRIENDS, not food.
Still, fabulous job.
Dear Gaelan.
ReplyDeleteI liked the essay, and the fact that you chose to compare friendship to food is not a surprise. I especially liked your loose sentence, and you really did a good job stretching it our. I read through your essay several times and could not find a mistake!
PS. Gaelan i know this is just a comparison, but your friends are NOT food. Don't eat them no matter how appetizing they may seem.
Dear Gaelen,
ReplyDeleteGreat start to essay number 12! I fully enjoyed your paragraph, and especially liked your last supporting detail with your metaphor comparing pizza to a friendship with you holding your friends up. Make sure to take a break before coming back to your essay for you may catch some of your small mistakes like putting your comma after and in your second commentary about chocolate being like friendship. Also, I would get more specific when you say “friends” by maybe thinking of one friend that reminds you of your metaphors with food. Other than this, spectacular job!