Gaelen Frink Essay #2 English Class September 22, 2010
Strangeness
My Thoughts on Myself
Whensome people think of themselves, they think of themselves as cool or awesome. I can think like that, but instead I think of myself as strange or different. This is an essay about myself. (TS) Some of friends say I am a very weird person, although I do not totally agree to this, my friends convinced me to write about myself. (SD) When I am sick, something unusual happens when I sneeze and blow my nose, it happens very loud. (CM1)When I once sneezed in the hallway, Mrs.Owen knew I was coming. (CM2) In addition, all my friends say my nose blowing is super loud, and it scares people who are not prepared for it. (SD) Secondly, people say I have a very different laugh, and uncontrollable laugh. (CM1) This might be because I laugh many times at things that are not that funny. (CM2) One time, I was laughing so hard when I was eating, and I could not stop laughing, and while this was happening, I had food in my mouth, and you can just imagine what happened. (SD) Lastly, anybody who knows me knows I love food. (CM1) When we ran the mile for school, my first time of the year was about 10 minutes. (CM2) For the second mile of the year, I had a time of about 7:36 and the reason for the big improvement was Oreos, and this just proves how much I love food. (CS) I might be a little different in many ways; no, make that more than usual, but at least I am able to admit it.
Bizarre, or any other word or synonym that describes strange all remind me of myself.All of these words are related to strange. People sometimes might call someone weird, but that person may think it is a good thing. Whenever someone calls me weird Iwill say thank you and I know.
Dear Gaelan, Great body paragraph. I never would have even thought about writing about myself. Your paragraph certaintly is funky, and definetly has its own style. The only thing i noticed was that you have two exclamation marks after oreos. Overall a great job.
Gaelen, I loved the topic you chose to write about, and yes, it does take guts to write about yourself. However, in your sentence,” One time I was laughing so hard when I was eating, I had food in my mouth; and you can just imagine what happened in the end.” It sounds all discombobulated, like you never really finished your thought. Also, I would recommend going through your paragraph very carefully after you are done writing it because I saw some punctuation errors, especially in you (TS). Overall I truly enjoyed your paragraph.
Dear Gaelan,
ReplyDeleteGreat body paragraph. I never would have even thought about writing about myself. Your paragraph certaintly is funky, and definetly has its own style. The only thing i noticed was that you have two exclamation marks after oreos. Overall a great job.
Gaelen,
ReplyDeleteI loved the topic you chose to write about, and yes, it does take guts to write about yourself. However, in your sentence,” One time I was laughing so hard when I was eating, I had food in my mouth; and you can just imagine what happened in the end.” It sounds all discombobulated, like you never really finished your thought. Also, I would recommend going through your paragraph very carefully after you are done writing it because I saw some punctuation errors, especially in you (TS). Overall I truly enjoyed your paragraph.