Essay Number 8

Solitariao (Solitary):

Comparing Levels of Loneliness

An Essay by Gaelen Frink

Eighth Grade English

Pine Point School

November 18, 2010

            (TS) “The most terrible poverty is loneliness, and the feeling of being unloved.”- Mother Teresa. (SD) This feeling of being unloved was probably deep in Dill’s gut from the beginning. (SD) Dill was neglected from the start even though he should have been loved, a feeling that is showed by someone close to you.  (SD) Dill and I sometimes feel lonely even though we are around people.(CS) The feeling of being alone is one of the worst.
           (TS)When Dill’s new parents adopted him, they really did not want to spend time with him, and this made Dill very lonely, an outcast. (SD) When he was adopted he was excited, but now he is abandoned. (CM1) Parents have kids because they want to spend time with them, except in Dill’s case “they weren’t interested in [him].” (CM2) His parents think that since they bought him something he should go play with a toy or read a book instead of spending time with them. (SD) Furthermore, his dad said they would make a boat together, but they never did. (CM1) This boat they were going to make was going to be a fishing boat, but “He just said it. We never did.” and Dill was looking forward to this. (CM2) His new parents irritated him one degree too much and he ran away from home. (CS) Dill was lonely because he was ignored, and his parents did not really know him; his new parents were not “interested in [him].”
           (TS)Have you ever felt so lonely that you were friendless to a point where it felt like you were unloved?  (SD) While this could be happening to you, you perceive it as if you are being ignored. (CM1) You feel like no one wants to talk to you, and this makes you feel lonely. (CM2) Some people just want to ignore you because of who you are and what you do. (SD) Occasionally when you are at a party or a dance and you do not recognize anyone, you are often lonely. (CM1) This is because you may not know anyone at the party and you are shy, alone. (CM2) When you are supposed to be having fun at the party, you are feeling empty, even deserted. (CM3) Even though everybody around you is having fun, you are by yourself. (CS) I can be lonely sometimes because there is no one around me, but I never have any fun being so alone.
           (TS) “The most terrible poverty is loneliness”-Mother Teresa. (SD) This was true because being alone for Dill is like poverty for him. (SD) When Dill feels alone he feels it deep down because he hates that feeling of abandonment. (SD) I also do not like being alone but it takes a little while to get used to the feeling nobody likes. (CS)When I get that feeling that I do not like, I know that I must be feeling bad because that feeling is the worst, that is the feeling of loneliness.

Self Assessment

1. I need to keep working on making my sentences flow so that they can be read without stopping.

2. One strong point that I see in this piece of writing is that I used many fast words which help the piece.

3. I am continuing to work on rereading my work so that it flows smoother because I do not always catch all of the mistakes.

4. My grade could possibly be a B, because I think I have improved in a lot of areas on this piece and I had good use of fast and bell words.